Here I am… At Blood River, where the Evil Deadmarsh lurks in his cave waiting for something to walk in. He’s hungry, I know it. I can hear his stomach rumbling. There’s one thing he wants, everyone to learn mathematics. I jump on a rock and over to the other side of Blood River. I get closer, closer, closer to the cave until now I’m in the mouth of the cave, standing exactly where the Evil Deadmarsh ate an elephant about twenty minutes ago. I’m walking further into the cave while loading my crossbow. He’s moving… rapidlly… getting closer until… ”ROAR, Have you learnt your bedmas yet?” “You will never get me alive.” “POW!” I shoot with my crossbow. “Bang, ahh” he hits me with his fists of fury. I fly out the cave and over Blood River, he follows. He gets out a plus sword and goes for a a gash tomy leg and I quickly dodge and get out my book grenada. “Get a touch of reading!” I yell. “Bang” The book grenade explodes with a burst of abc. I remember… he’s scared of water because he’s allergic, I get out my water bottle and spray him and he instantly melts into a bubbly liquid. Now I must go to Live Forest and defeat Marnol, but until then the story is…
To Be Continued…
By LM
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I want to know what happens! I enjoy how you used the power of words to defeat your enemy! I wonder how you could use the power of numbers?
Wow! What an amazingly imaginative story! I wonder if the Evil Deadmarsh is modelled off a real person 
I hope it will be continued – I can’t wait.
I can’t imagine I would want to be there. It’s a great story well done!
I am so impressed with your story Liam, way to go. I look forward to reading the rest of the children’s blogs. I can’t wait to hear what your next adventure is!
Fantastic story, full of suspense and excitement – it made me want to keep reading to see what would happen next. I can’t wait to read what happens next.
This is an amazing piece of writing. I can’t wait for the next chapter. That Evil Deadmarsh is a worry. You keep yourself safe and keep a bottle of water handy.
Great story…I wonder what could be used to bring the Evil Deadmarsh back to life and what else is he allergic to? Fantastic expressive language! Keep up the great writing!
Wow! This is a fantastic story Liam. You have obviously put a lot of thought and effort into it. You are an amazing writer and I am looking forward to reading more about ‘The Adventures of Liam’.
Well done LH! Our class thought your story was really creative and you have used strong verbs and adverbs. Sounds like you love reading! We were wondering when the second half of the story will be finished because we are looking forward to reading it as it is very interesting so far!
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