My Week

Posted on March 12, 2008 by mrstetupu.
Categories: Work of the Week.



Wednesday was the most enjoyable day of my life.  She was gone, my sister was finally gone for 3 whole days!

I was exploding with happiness inside!  I was so relieved I could hardly wait for 2 nights of no fighting and sleeping alone.  But time went by quickly and she soon came back.  I was watching t.v when I heard mum’s car pulling itself up the driveway.  I quickly ran out of the house to greet her when I found myself looking at the horrible sight that was my sister.  She was standing in front of me looking like a raging bull.  I wasn’t scared, I was used to her angus face.  “Back already?” I said with a moan. “Just be quiet” she replied. I turned away leaving the door open as I went and sat in the living room hoping she wouldn’t join me, and she didn’t.  She just stomped into our room.  Meanwhile, mom came in looking angry and tired at the same time.  I knew she was dealing with a lot with her around.

On Sunday we watched t.v for hours. A programme was coming on that was my dad’s favourite, “Star voice of India”.  But this time he was more excited than usual because his favourite Bollywood actor was the special guest.  We watched a few more serials but my attention was not on them it was on the swimming sports in two days time!

If someone asked me a question I would answer in a moan.  My attention was completely diverted to the swimming.  I couldn’t dream about anything else except coming first second or third in swimming.  Suddenly a thought struck me, what if the people I’m racing shoot ahead of me?  What if I come last place and what if I make a horrible dive into the pool and all the water rushes into my mouth?  What if???  Nervousness swept over me like I was being swept over by a tsunami.  I talked to my dad about it but he would only say “try your best” and “it won’t matter what place you come”.  That didn’t make me feel any better.  I was depressed, I was nervous and whatever I was, I was definitely not confident.  I just wanted to come home with a certificate saying first, second or third place.

I didn’t.  It was always the same, 4th place. 4th place in freestyle, 4th place in breaststroke and 4th place in relays.  That was sad but I do have a good plan to make my sister jealous! “Mohahaha!”

By S.S
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  Miss Signal
Comment on March 13th, 2008.

Well done on a fabulous piece of writing – i really like the sentence that said “Nervousness swept over me like I was being swept over by a tsunami.” That is such a well crafted sentence. I can’t wait to hear what your plan is! Keep up the great blogging! :)

  Mrs.S
Comment on March 13th, 2008.

What expressive language! I am amazed the way you have made the recount sound so interesting.

  HS
Comment on March 13th, 2008.

I wish you come first in swimming. better luck next time. well done for the awesome writing! very very expressive…

  mrstetupu
Comment on March 13th, 2008.

SS, I like the way you have incorporated similes, personification and even hyperboles into your story. I am intrigued about your plan to make your sister jealous!

  AC
Comment on April 15th, 2008.

great work

i hope you tried really hard and got something

thanks
AC :-)

  Jonathan
Comment on June 29th, 2008.

Why cant my sister leave for three days…

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